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Hmmm - Squish - 04-27-2004
welp.... i like to write... heres a songin'
Time flies when all your fed is lies
never relent try to repent
you know you never can
always want to be something
never will with out the will
found in a pool face first lyin on the ground
dogs from the pound knawin on your shoe
till your found dead on the ground
never amounted to more than the money at the undertakers
left in the cold of the alley
life savins spent in bottles of glass corodid by the alcohol in them
parents tried and tried to get you outta slump
but you decided to die
talent wasted worse than talent never had
tryin to decide what to do with yourself
all you can think of is the 40 oz of freedom in the bag in your hand
By Jon
what you think?
Hmmm - Guest - 04-28-2004
it was ok but to many rimes that was more of a poem i think cause a song uses 1 or 2 key frazes and repetes them
Hmmm - Squish - 04-29-2004
meh... its not really a song... just writting