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[Slasher186]

Hey, Rws and I have been working on this and we need some help.
The wind blows, the leaves fall
The crunch of leaves beneath your feet, I can't help but feel they're victims all
The chilly air and the chimney smoke
The wind whispers without note
The feeling of feathers, the wind pushes you as if there's something to gain
This brings forth a feeling I cannot evoke
For fall touches me deeply in a way I can not explain
As if looking directly into your lover’s eyes
It can’t but hurt to say “Good-bye.”

We are willing for any revision you wish to make.

[Rulepool2]

No idea if this is what you were going for but just an idea


The wind blows, as the leaves fall
With crunch of leaves beneath our feet; I can't help but feel they are victims all
The chilly air and the chimney smoke
The wind whispers without a note
The feeling of feathers with wind pushing you as if there's something to gain.
This brings forth a feeling I cannot evoke
For fall touches me deeply in a way I can’t explain;
As if looking directly into your lover’s eyes
It can’t but hurt to say “Good-bye.”

[CloudFuel]

Hehehe NOT BAD! You've learned well my child...:)jk, great job though!